Dr. 2's diagnosis of patient Of Serpents & Sea Spray by Rachel Bublitz

 
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Patient: Of Serpents and Sea Spray

Legal Guardian: Playwright Rachel Bublitz

Insurance: Paperkutz

Symptoms: aching adventurism, imaginative escapism

Diagnosis: reality aversion

Patient Description:

Enter the goddess Athena, stage right. The patient's young hero has a youthful imagination that wasn't cloy or childish. They were so darling I gave them a cute sticker. However, their major dysfunction is language. I understand that the hero is a child, but many parts of the dialogue were either redundant, amateur, or babyish. Athena is a total bloke. The French sailors were rusty with cliched parlance. The patient is not a flop story-wise. Even with the inflammation of the language, the story is healthy. An Rx for language distilling is what this patient needs. 

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